tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post3217862051585574242..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Blog 7, Option 1Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-69641933352764692862013-11-20T09:46:48.561-05:002013-11-20T09:46:48.561-05:00Your first paragraph is oddly vague about what, ex...Your first paragraph is oddly vague about what, exactly, you find to be so difficult. I'm not saying that you're wrong, or choosing poorly - I'm just saying your focus could have been clearer.<br /><br />The section about the domed ceiling refers to a school he attended as a child - I'm not sure how important it is, but there it is. I could care less that you're arguably misreading this passage, but note that you're focused on explaining it, rather than on focusing on what, exactly, makes it difficult. If something is truly difficult, rushing too hastily into explanations might not be desirable.<br /><br />I'm fine with your reading/intrepretation of the list of architects, but it remains on a rather vague, general level, and I question whether it's really best to tackle this together with the material in the previous paragraph *unless* you want to work on explaining how they're connected. In any case, I still think you're leaping too quickly to explaining the text - if it's truly difficult, the explanations shouldn't be this easy.<br /><br />In the last couple paragraphs, you retreat away from having any precise argument or even focus. Your explanations of what's happening on this page are fine (some are better, some worse) - but you try to explain too much all at once, without really asking about the difficulty itself. Explaining difficult material is not the same thing as explaining why it is difficult, if that makes sense.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-37888699077218269262013-11-15T17:23:34.742-05:002013-11-15T17:23:34.742-05:00Your explanation as to what the content of the pas...Your explanation as to what the content of the passage means is very good. When discussing Truant's story about the girl, or ghost, that he refers to as Ashley, you miss a part of the passage where the girl (which I presume to be Ashley or who Johnny believes to be her, although his wording is unclear) tells the story of how they met in Texas, only for him to confide in the reader that he's never been there. This could work towards your argument that his troubled childhood is pulling him into insanity, as he ends up with a girl that obviously isn't who he thought she was all on the pretense that she is possibly Ashley. You may well read the passage differently (one of the best properties of the book), so I might be wrong here, but I feel like that portion of Johnny's footnote is too large to ignore outright. Another thing that could have been expanded upon is the presence of the "windows" on each adjacent page. You mention that they reference the book's architectural themes, but the irony that they appear to seemingly decorate the labyrinth of pages that is meant to mirror the Navidson's house is something that could be worth examining if you decide to possibly use this as a starting point for you final project. All that being said, I still think that your examination of how the difficult content and formatting works in the novel's favor is very good.Beanwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12681436998291533744noreply@blogger.com