tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post3425442643754778764..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: House of DadaAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-78185631959727096462009-04-26T21:13:00.000-04:002009-04-26T21:13:00.000-04:00This is a fun, witty project, rooted in a great id...This is a fun, witty project, rooted in a great idea, which you followed through in detail.<br /><br />I liked the first list by far the best, although all of them were perfectly interesting; the peculiar thing about the first list was just how eerie all of them were, and how applicable many of them were. Neat.<br /><br />Your introduction was clumsy, with several sentences fragments and a general lack of clarity. Your writing was much better through the rest of the paper, although your failure to cite your specific sources was irritating and very un-academic.<br /><br />Your failure to cite actually bring up my only real dissatisfaction with the project. You end rather abruptly - on the interesting but incomplete assertion that you have become Z/J/D himself in the process of playing your Dadaist games. I'm interested in the proposition; the implication to me seems to be that not only do you take Dada very seriously (maybe particularly in its emphasis on premade objects, or whatever the right term is?), but that you think the book itself has a deep affinity with Dada (in this way, acting perhaps as an expansion of or response to Erika's paper...), or anyway that it could be understood that way. In other words, I think there is a whole range of implicit assumptions and implications here, which could have been productively made explicit.<br /><br />I liked your inclusion of photographs. That was one of a number of nice touches through this piece.<br /><br />It's good work, entertaining, eerie, and very fitting in a number of ways. I'm happy with it, but it does feel somewhat incomplete to me (it would have been awesome to have had some substantial part of this as a draft - that might have helped you get some of the implicit material out).Adam Johnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588769281227456640noreply@blogger.com