tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post3491639201700215020..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Final Project Proposal - Dear Esther Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-11056319570799785532014-04-05T15:44:23.955-04:002014-04-05T15:44:23.955-04:00For a final project, I think it's best to spen...For a final project, I think it's best to spend some time at the beginning thinking through what your interests are, and thinking through whether other people would share them (and how to talk them into sharing them). Asking whether DE is art or not has some value, I think - but I think it would be really helpful for you to ask what you hope to get out of answering that question. <br /><br />Incidentally, I think bringing your argument re: how the caves are a metaphor for the human body into the foreground is a good idea.<br /><br />The great refusal isn't quite what you think it is: there is a kind of political dimension to it (what are we refusing? The world as it is!)<br /><br />"The maze will be further defined and clarified while explaining that certain physiological processes of the human body are also mazes, but not really. " -- good<br /><br />Overall: I'm not opposed to you revisiting this revision. I'm always happy to hear more about Dear Esther, and I think that you have a lot to say about it. What you need to work on is the big picture: what your central argument is, and why we care. Your strength is that you have lots of ideas, but especially for the final project you want to force yourself into more unity and coherence. Being able to explain briefly what your central idea is and why we should care - then holding yourself to that topic - would do wonders for you.<br /><br />Note: Your bibliography is quite good, and helps clarify what you're up to.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-9829027397994230072014-04-05T05:21:28.493-04:002014-04-05T05:21:28.493-04:00I'm not going to lie, I was moderately confuse...I'm not going to lie, I was moderately confused with your entire proposal for a while. Obviously you state what exactly you plan to write about in the very first sentence, but the following sentences kind of work their way into a confusing trail. <br />But after rereading a few sentences, it all came together and seemed genuinely interesting. <br />I think your plans to interpret Marcuse via Dear Esther is fascinating. In my opinion, it seems like you have a very structured, establish shape of what you plan to write about for the final paper. <br />My only point of concern came up after I fully read your proposal, is there enough to actually write about without repeating yourself; mainly because the game is relatively short and potential poses difficulty. My concerns however faded after reading your detailed bibliography. After reading a few of your sources I had an "OOO" and "AH!" moments that made me even more excited for your final work.<br />In all, I think you have a pretty sound understanding and vision for the final work, best of luck. Kurt Wichmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14895227603065077314noreply@blogger.com