tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post3576241249766988692..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Prompt 1Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-16133815057079518702013-10-26T19:50:08.682-04:002013-10-26T19:50:08.682-04:00Good introduction. Re: the 2nd paragraph, I'd...Good introduction. Re: the 2nd paragraph, I'd point out that his obsessive interest in architecture is present here too.<br /><br />The 3rd paragraph is startling. By this argument, there is a way in which the real subject matter of the book - all 350 pages or whatever - kind of takes place between this two frames. It's a smart observation, if you can make it work through attention to relevant details.<br /><br />The best paragraph may be the one about JC's perspective. I like this when applied to these two frames (and I'd like to see what you have to say about similar frames, of that same building, at the end of the book - which is one possible starting point for a revision), but what this makes me want is, in some ways, a defense of JC's perspective. Curiously, if he is the only one to see the leap, there is some truth in the counterintuitive claim that he *is*, after all, special and smart - I'd like to see you think through this (whether you like my wording or not, I suspect you have something at least vaguely similar in the back of your mind).<br /><br />You have a lot of smart things to say at the end of the essay, especially in your analysis of Ware's quote from the inside cover. I still feel some absences, which would offer ripe possibilities for revision.<br /><br />What position (artistically? intellectually?) does Ware hold about suicide, or what view do you have in response to the book? What do Superman's splash of bright color in a drag world signify, especially given that it is paired with suicide? I agree that it's a good handling "of a sensitive subject", but the value of that handling presumably leads to a response on your part. What is that response? Simply expanding this essay to incorporate the whole book would be one critical strategy in a revision - pushing what you're trying to get from it farther would be the other critical component, I think.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com