tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post4311346696471221987..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Option 3Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-38973116875078694172008-10-28T15:16:00.000-04:002008-10-28T15:16:00.000-04:00Matt - good feedback, even if brief.Charity - Matt...Matt - good feedback, even if brief.<BR/><BR/>Charity - Matt makes all the important points. I'll reiterate two of them.<BR/><BR/>* You get Haraway almost 100% wrong, which is fine for a first draft, but should have indicated that you needed a revision.<BR/>* There's no clear argument.Adam Johnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588769281227456640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-65254454489666539862008-10-10T00:15:00.000-04:002008-10-10T00:15:00.000-04:00First off, you need an argument for this post. You...First off, you need an argument for this post. You spend a lot of time summarizing and explaining, but you don't talk about what that means. Your examples don't build to anything.<BR/><BR/>Second, I'm not sure that you quite understood the Haraway piece. In my interpretation she is not using the cyborg as a literal image of people. It is a metaphor describing how people, and especially women, are fundamentally changing in their identity due to the influx of technology. Also, I don't think that she is against the idea of cyborg at all, I think that she is very much in favor of it. <BR/><BR/>This essay was very difficult and I didn't know quite what to make of it either until we got to class. But keeping in mind what we talked about in class, I would suggest that you reread it and rethink your post.Matt Carrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05072887927852026026noreply@blogger.com