tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post4447630442339689848..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Illogical ThoughtAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-43172598323619736782008-09-23T15:10:00.000-04:002008-09-23T15:10:00.000-04:00Since you haven't posted a revised version, I'm gr...Since you haven't posted a revised version, I'm grading the original version.Adam Johnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588769281227456640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-74519575583406845892008-09-18T11:23:00.000-04:002008-09-18T11:23:00.000-04:00The inevitable first comment is that this is very ...The inevitable first comment is that this is very short, which much of it taking up by a single quote. There simply isn't enough writing here to develop your thoughts.<BR/><BR/>Now, on to the actual content. Is this really a difficult section in Lyotard? To me it seems <I>relatively</I> straightforward - and you certainly don't seem to have much difficulty explaining it.<BR/><BR/>There's no transition at all between your discussion of Lyotard and the Samuel Johnson quote. My copy of Lyotard is out on loan, so I can't verify - but I certainly don't remember this quote from the essay. What are you doing with it? This didn't follow at all to me.<BR/><BR/>Your discussion of free will might possibly work if you explained what you're doing at much greater length, with far more context (within Lyotard, that is). Why do you think he's talking about free will? Where does that topic come up? It seems like a tangent, but maybe you have an idea here.<BR/><BR/>Short version: you aren't really doing the assignment as written; that's the source of your difficulties. You are explaining the passage, rather than its difficulty - and even your explanation of the passage, which moves into one seeming tangent after another, makes little sense to me.Adam Johnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11588769281227456640noreply@blogger.com