tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post4569011357883425228..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Blog #1, Prompt #1Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-72437692633783225722012-01-16T11:46:42.251-05:002012-01-16T11:46:42.251-05:00There is a central issue here. You say that Frank...There is a central issue here. You say that Frankenstein presents or includes a theory of isolation: I agree. But what is that theory? In other words, what argue about isolation is being presented? What is the relationship between isolation and human nature? How do we understand Victor, or the monster, differently when focusing on issues circling around isolation?<br /><br />Here, you simply claim that there *is* a theory, then you summarize some of the relevant moments in the plot. You're thinking, certainly, about the right moments in the book - but where do those thoughts take you? Most of the material here is summarization, and very little of this summarization serves a clear purpose.<br /><br />You are moving toward an argument, at least, when discussing the monster's motives. But exploring how the actions of one character are rooted in isolation is not yet articulating a general theory *of* isolation - which would require, at the very least, discussing Victor's isolation as well as the monster's, and in relationship to one another as well as in isolation from one another.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-15386828559177882102012-01-14T12:00:19.896-05:002012-01-14T12:00:19.896-05:00Hey Kira,
I really like your argument, partially ...Hey Kira,<br /><br />I really like your argument, partially because I can see similarities in my own essay regarding the absence and presence of others. I have a few suggestions that I hope can improve your essay.<br /><br />First, in the part where you mention that Victor realizes the consequences of his obsession, you could mention that he realizes them, but doesn't seem to really feel the need to come out and confess, but rather chooses to isolate himself and his creation from the ones he loves (a task that he only has the power to carry out one end of). <br /><br />I really like your 6th paragraph, and I think it has potential to be expanded to really strengthen your point. Perhaps a quote could help build it up more.<br /><br />And Lastly, the 7th paragraph is also a very good argument, and I believe you could strengthen that as well. Perhaps you could mention that had the monster not learned of the positive emotions associated with togetherness, his acts of vengeance would not have occurred. <br /><br />This is a really good argument, and I feel that this essay has the potential to be expanded and that there is still more to be mentioned.Ben Fellowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05890078361181898871noreply@blogger.com