tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post4670099564933965075..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: incomplete final paper for perusal and help.Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-60993195120850817502012-04-21T14:56:36.977-04:002012-04-21T14:56:36.977-04:00You begin with the important (not obvious, but imp...You begin with the important (not obvious, but important) claim that DADES is really about societal ideology - that the Science fiction trappings are *merely* trappings. That's a step, if a small one, toward beginning with a clear argument.<br /><br />In your second paragraph: yes, you should integrate DADES at this point. You need to find a way of presenting a clear argument sooner, not later - this is one way to do so.<br /><br />2nd question - I dont' think you really need more historically context about aspirations. It's secondary to your paper, *and* general knowledge. What you need more is a credible ways of addressing DADES in terms of victorianism - that's where you've always struggled.<br /><br />You continue to need *some* way of justifying in more detail your choice to bring DADES together with testing/identification of prostitutes. I continue to think it's a great concept, but why we *should* bring them into dialogue with one another continues to be the unanswered question haunting this essay.<br /><br />I would, indeed, like at least a footnote about the connection between prostitution and industrialization. Especially since prostitution is so old and so varied!<br /><br />Overall: Your research is interesting, as in all earlier drafts. The connection seems interesting and worthwhile, as in all previous drafts. You are struggling to make the leap from it being a historical paper to a critical paper, though. Your challenge is to articulate throughout (including at the beginning) why we *should* read DADES through this critical lenses. A plausible connection isn't good enough - a vision that articulates why and how we should make that plausible connection is what you need.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com