tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post5486122661935446857..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Language and PowerAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-2859287187882945342014-02-21T22:51:54.128-05:002014-02-21T22:51:54.128-05:00Your discussion of Portal is maybe too long-winded...Your discussion of Portal is maybe too long-winded. The narrative component isn't a bad idea, but maybe you don't need as much of it in a short essay.<br /><br />Your grasp of Marcuse on language seems good, and your initial application of that aspect of Marcuse to Portal also so seems good, if brief. What I really wanted to see - and what would need to be at the heart of a revision - is a movement beyond the initial analysis.<br /><br />You are observing, in some detail, that Glados does a lot of the things with language which, Marcuse argues, are central to our society. But what does that observation *mean*? Does that help us understand Portal's purpose? Does that help us understand our world? What do you do, in other words, with that observation?Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-13654751765918040362014-02-21T17:08:19.932-05:002014-02-21T17:08:19.932-05:00I love your opening paragraph. The style at which ...I love your opening paragraph. The style at which you describe the opening sequence of the game is detailed and exactly how I reacted. The way you connect Marcuse's writing to Portal is alarmingly true. Although I didn't complete the game, it is a scary thought to think of congressmen as Glados in Portal seeing how the game ends. <br />The passages from Marcuse perfectly connect to your argument. It would have been interesting if you had brought in the idea of how Marcuse critiques politicians for using abbreviations. In Portal we don't necessarily see Glados use abbreviations, but we also aren't given an exhaustive description or explanation behind what we are doing/being forced to do.Kurt Wichmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14895227603065077314noreply@blogger.com