tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post6022272262767688477..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: ProposalAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-42782462089980999492012-04-13T23:01:58.369-04:002012-04-13T23:01:58.369-04:00I'll just add a little to my comments on the p...I'll just add a little to my comments on the previous draft.<br /><br />The concept is fine, but very broad. You need to find a way of making what is broad at least somewhat more specific and focused. The initial, easy way to do this is narrow your texts down - do a reading of Jimmy Corrigna by way of "Technology and the Changing Face..." for instance, using other books only in a secondary way. You need *some* way to focus - this is only one possibility.<br /><br />Your argument isn't terribly clear, although your area of interest is. What I wonder here is whether your'e really arguing that technology is irrelevant (that is, that the things which *really* matter are in no sense unique to our time) or that technology is leading us in some bad directions (perhaps away from the things which really matter). That apparent tension may resolve as you focus on a more limited set of texts - or, it may help you to narrow your focus.<br /><br />Short version: focus, focus, focus. Fewer texts, clearer argument, *within* this area of interest that you've defined.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com