tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post6074789882247367817..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Ideology and the Penfield: An example of how ideology manipulates and forms societyAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-23415734465548654702012-01-29T16:03:43.775-05:002012-01-29T16:03:43.775-05:00I think the initial discussion of what an ideology...I think the initial discussion of what an ideology is might be valuable - it's a good summary of an important set of concepts - but I'm not clear on what you're doing with it, really. A lengthy introduction to a concept in a short essay would normally imply that this introduction is vital/necessary. But for what?<br /><br />Similarly, your focused reading of the beginning of the novel is interesting, but also at least *seems* undirected. Clearly you are showing us, in some detail, that Deckard has a different relationship to the prevailing ideology than Iran does - but presumably there's more to it than that, and it would be nice for what you're moving toward to be clarified.<br /><br />The third paragraph brings some clarification. It would work better, though, if you returned to the later moment when Iran proceeds into her depression, because that strongly confirms her questioning of or movement against the prevailing ideology<br /><br />I'd like you to move beyond simply presenting that there is an ideological system in the novel which regulates itself through its members. What does it mean that Deckard is an enforcer of the ideology? Does Iran's rebellion have any help of success? What kind of an alternative, if any, does Iran represent? Etc. This is a good, well-executed starting point, but it needs to be headed *somewhere*.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-44675295083197082462012-01-29T03:57:24.885-05:002012-01-29T03:57:24.885-05:00Hey Robin,
I think you chose a really interesting...Hey Robin,<br /><br />I think you chose a really interesting point to focus on in the book. The Penfield passage not only introduces the futuristic setting well, but also gives great insight to Iran and Rick's true characters. It's easy to take away that mood modulation is a common tool in this society, but to add the viewpoint that Iran is a rebel in this society by choosing to feel her own emotions really gives this essay some depth and shows some good analysis. You chose a small except and did a solid job of expanding upon the idea to apply it to their society as a whole.<br /><br />If you decide to edit this, I think the one challenge you should try to overcome is to find a way to lay out the story and provide the details you did here while having the room for more analysis. While the quotes from the story are interesting as reference, your analysis is the star of the show. I want to hear what you think about what Rick's dependence on the Penfield means for him as a person, why he is so pushy with Iran to use it and what an ideology that resists responsive feelings fears, as in why does this ideology believe that genuine feelings are an evil.Brian Moellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07286405933796094725noreply@blogger.com