tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post6580520634103083977..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Prompt 1: Isolation Represented Through ImagesAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-3888465561819810622013-10-26T17:17:31.765-04:002013-10-26T17:17:31.765-04:00The introduction is a little wordy but you still m...The introduction is a little wordy but you still make important points - "and the movement between panels is implied rather than explicitly stated." Your focus on body language is good - will it become more precise?<br /><br />Your discussion of Jimmy and the woman on the plane is excellent, with one major omission - how do *you* read it? After all, either interpretation takes us in interesting directions. This is smart, but more interesting as a starting point than an ending point in a discussion.<br /><br />The 3rd paragraph only slightly advances the work of the 2nd paragraph. In some ways it repeats what you've already said.<br /><br />Your discussion of the hunching is good, but also inconclusive.<br /><br />Overall: Your reading got this conversation includes some of your best written work of the semester. It's somewhat repetitive, which isn't the end of the world - that could be fixed easily in a revision, in which you would focus on advancing the argument, and being careful not toe repeat it - but the larger flaw is your refusal to really interpret him, although you've set us up for a strong interpretation in your excellent 2nd paragraph.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com