tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post6890168903774970123..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Are female characters passive- Prompt # 4Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-90161347645714636372017-07-21T15:33:34.598-04:002017-07-21T15:33:34.598-04:00Just got my cheque for $500.
Sometimes people don...<b>Just got my cheque for $500.</b><br /><br />Sometimes people don't believe me when I tell them about how much you can earn <b>filling out paid surveys</b> online...<br /><br />So I show them a video of myself actually <a href="http://opinion-surveys.syntaxlinks.com/r/TakeSurveysForCash" rel="nofollow"><b>getting paid $500</b></a> for filling paid surveys to set the record straight once and for all.Bloggerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07287821785570247118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-76473495811176636472013-09-07T11:56:32.791-04:002013-09-07T11:56:32.791-04:00Let me note, first, that while your use of languag...Let me note, first, that while your use of language is overall quite good, there are certainly places where better proofreading could have helped you. For instance "passivity" is correct, rather than "passiveness." You also sometimes connected clauses awkwardly at times - your use of semicolons and colons could be improved. <br /><br />"I find their passiveness to be politically significant." This is an unusually astute first argument, although I'd like to see the exact (rather than general) political significance addressed from the start. I also very much like the observation that what seems to be passivity may actually be selflessness.<br /><br />If you revise, you might use this connection between passivity and selflessness to *defend* the apparent passivity of some of the women more actively, or you might make the more political argument that they should not be selfless, at least not so universally selfless. In other words, you could dig deeper into the feminist or proto-feminist dimensions of the novel, by arguing that a questioning of passivity is also, at least in this case, a questioning of selflessness.<br /><br />My main point, though, is that while your central insight is very good, your use of the text to investigate it is mixed. Rather than touching briefly on so many women, you might have done best with a more extended discussion of Caroline and Justine, for instance.<br /><br />In a revision, I'd mostly be looking for a much more detailed use of the text throughout the novel, although I'd also hope for the argument to become more refined (and perhaps even political) itself.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com