tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post817326896615342011..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Revision 2: Fathers and Super-Man in Jimmy CorriganAdamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-4000704499910030332013-10-07T04:12:16.286-04:002013-10-07T04:12:16.286-04:00Here's a video I made about Brogan's artic...Here's a video I made about Brogan's article main themes: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g74dDaNMRcISuturnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098293657675640099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-56332470401830510392013-03-30T11:22:15.412-04:002013-03-30T11:22:15.412-04:00# RJ
## Early paragraphs
A minor nitpick - I thin...# RJ<br /><br />## Early paragraphs<br />A minor nitpick - I think you overuse short paragraphs, and the argument would flow a little more smoothly with longer paragraphs.<br /><br />While there is nothing surprising in your early analysis of superheroes and father figures that should surprise most readers, your attention to detail in what is basically an argumentative summary or summary-with-argument of critical events is good. It flows well, it integrates research effectively, and you're especially good on the signifance of the imagined stabbing. I'd like to see even more attention to detail, though (for instance - why does his father, who now lives in Wisconsin (right?) have this image of Chicago? Is it a kind of nostalgia for Jimmy and his mother?<br /><br />## Moving on<br /><br />Your use of research continues to be effective. "And as Brogan points out, if you look closely, Jimmy’s hallucination of the truck driver as Super-Man can also be seen as Jimmy’s father wearing a mask and hovering over him." I like this observation a lot, but it does raise a question: what are you doing *with* your research here? Or are you basically repeating their arguments? It's not entirely clear where your voice - perhaps as an extension of Brogan's argument - really emerges into its own. There's a lot to like here, but we could use more clarity about where *you* are taking us.<br /><br />## closing paragraphs<br /><br />You are certainly right, at some level, that Ware's use of satire especially urges us to turn Jimmy Corrigan inwards. Similarly, the importance of Chicago and the exposition urge us to think in terms of history and social types, not just individual misadventures. But if this is really what you think - that Jimmy Corrigan is something we should use to read our own inner lives - then the way to really make that argument work is to *do it*. That, of course, is potentially uncomfortable territory - but it's also the way of following through on your argument and moving it past the very effective but also overshadowing influence of Brogan's essay. You seem to be moving toward your own *use* of Brogan, rather than repetition, especially at the end, but you don't quite follow through on that promise.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.com