tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post984081384683304078..comments2023-11-05T07:27:43.837-05:00Comments on Narrative and Technology: Prompt 1Adamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-57553994240420503082013-09-07T10:43:11.200-04:002013-09-07T10:43:11.200-04:00Your first paragraph is ok, but not great - it set...Your first paragraph is ok, but not great - it sets forth a very general argument but not a specific one. You could have easily combined the 1st and 2nd paragraphs.<br />I like the idea that V’s love for E resonantes with W’s love for his sister. If this is the case - and it is a good idea - you should be able to do something with the creepy/sexual/problematic nature of E and V’s relationship - does Walton engage with that, too, or does he gloss it over? They both may love their sister/“sister”, but you should be engaging with the problematic side of that relationship, not just the easy/friendly side.<br /><br />In the 2nd to last paragraph you begin to think through how Walton’s love for Victor may blind him to Victor’s dark side. Good. This is the most potentially interesting and challenging part of your essay. However, you leave it at a highly speculative level. If you were to pursue this in a revision, I’d want to see a detailed analysis of the language, hopefully from multiple parts of the novel, showing how Walton’s understanding of Victor is occluded by his passion.<br /><br />So, you could use more detail both showing W’s love for V, and especially when showing where/how specifically W is thereby influenced/twisted by his feelings, and is therefore unable to see the truth.<br /><br />I found your last sentence very interesting - I wonder if that idea could be expanded.Adamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16302919444091859459noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8692381608294018617.post-14758401321670140382013-09-06T21:35:53.997-04:002013-09-06T21:35:53.997-04:00Nicely done Sarah. Your points about Walton hearin...Nicely done Sarah. Your points about Walton hearing Frankenstein's story are clear and make sense. There is definitely a parallel between Walton/Margaret's and Victor/Elizabeth's relationships. To make your essay even stronger, I would suggest pulling another example from the story. Perhaps comment on other parts of Frankenstein's story that Walton would have a "clouded" judgement on or maybe think about other characters besides Victor that Walton could relate to in Victor's story. Other than another example, the essay is very well written.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06060387048088887140noreply@blogger.com