Peer editing results

I think the major criticism with my project so far was the fact that it doesn't flow very well. The individual bits and pieces stand alone just fine, but in the bigger picture, their arguments are weak. What I need to do is piece the branches of my essay together and make sure that each pathway makes sense the whole way through. Also, after reading John's paper, I've decided I need to spend considerably more time on some of my other album analysis. Some are a bit shallow and lacking.