I had many style errors, such as me saying "pretty much" and "although" like I was not sure of myself. So I need to make sure I am sure of myself in the paper. Also, I need more argument than plot summaries. I think it is because I did not have enough written to have an argument that was well thought out. There was a couple suggestions on how I run with this: maybe why do directors need to adapt or evolutionize novels to fit films. Or compare how 2001 was adapted from novel to HOL was adapted from video. Lastly, my introduction has a couple confusing sentences that I need to break down.